It Hurts To Lift The Anchor – Haiku #5


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” to lift the anchor,

heart harboured love, alone-

– in silence, it hurts “

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for a heart that harbored love for long, too long,

in silence and delusion,

it hurts while trying to lift the anchor (to speak out the love)

(extension)

because of the very reasons why it had to be harboured in silence  😐

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This post is an entry in Haiku Challenge for April 2012 at Haiku Heights. The prompt being “harboured”.

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20 thoughts on “It Hurts To Lift The Anchor – Haiku #5

      • thank you Sarab.. I will try to improve.. πŸ™‚

        and also, i tried another haiku on “deserted” but had to post it now, since i only understood the syllables part today, i had to tweak it to follow the rules.
        i would be glad to hear you say something about it.. my homepage will has the post, if you are free right now.

  1. This is good one.. only to make it a haiku have a relook at syllables.. you may choose to take out.. from, my and that..from the second line…it will then be seven syllable…just a suggestion.. this is line with what you have written in your note.. a suggestion..

    • πŸ™‚ thank you sir. I am only glad that you are guiding me.
      after you pointed at the second line, if see “yes…even after removing from,my and that, the meaning remains the same”… i felt pleasure realizing that.. i think this is what haiku is..
      thank you.. πŸ™‚

    • I would have been only glad if you did point it out..i am new to haiku, so help would be the most welcome thing…so, next time, don’t hesitate.
      and thank you, Grace πŸ™‚

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